My nits/edits/suggestions

Wall Street Journal, has published an article -- > Wall Street Journal, reports

Style question: Why the underline for emphasis instead of bold or italic? Nothing wrong with it, I'm just not used to seeing it.

materializing (1-Gig RAM is the practical Vista minimum). --> materializing. (1 Gig RAM is the practical Vista minimum.) Note the periods. And I'd either spell out gigabyte or abbreviate as GB, or even just 1G. People say "one gig" but I've never seen it spelled out that way.

Microsoft co-president of the Platform Products and Services Group --> co-president of Microsoft's Platform Products and Services Group It reads like a Microsoft employee holds a position on a non-Microsoft industry group.

Vista, and it's companion programs -- Drop the comma

but there's plenty wrong.. -- Two periods

offer precious little Windows users want beyond what's in Windows XP, but there's plenty wrong.. --> offer precious little Windows users want beyond what's in Windows XP, and plenty of things they don't want:

Microsoft says the screws will be turned down even tighter due to rampant piracy of Vista already being experienced. -- Passive voice in both instances. Not sure how to re-write this.

Swap the DRM and Windows Update bullets, and move the "criplle your computer" line to the end of the DRM bullet. IOW:

# Windows Update is now mandatory. What's wrong with that? You have no defense against patches that break other stuff.

# Microsoft's draconian DRM (Digital Rights Management) features not only interfere with your enjoyment of entertainment media you have purchased, but force you to have a much more powerful and expensive machine just to achieve XP level performance (V14). Worse, Microsoft has promised the media moguls they will cripple your computer if any DRM problems are found with your computer's hardware or drivers - this by Windows Update, of course (V14).

Vista was so good a service pack --> Vista was so good that a service pack

Most planned new features --> Most new features planned

in favor of one, a draconian --> in favor of one: a draconian

"one size fits all", that --> "one size fits all", the idea that

"premium content" has no place on business computers anyway. -- I disagree. There is a huge amount of corporate training done via Flash, WMV, etc.

increasing PR expenditures, working on ways to kill Windows XP to force Vista adoption, and ramp up --> increasing PR expenditures, working on ways to kill Windows XP to force Vista adoption, and ramping up

It seems like jumping from the frying pan into the fire. --> It seems like jumping from the frying pan into a smaller frying pan.

If you happen to be such a software developer --> If you happen to be such a software publisher

Post #278,174 by drewk 3/13/07 8:10:19 PM Reply	My nits/edits/suggestions Wall Street Journal, has published an article -- > Wall Street Journal, reports Style question: Why the underline for emphasis instead of bold or italic? Nothing wrong with it, I'm just not used to seeing it. materializing (1-Gig RAM is the practical Vista minimum). --> materializing. (1 Gig RAM is the practical Vista minimum.) Note the periods. And I'd either spell out gigabyte or abbreviate as GB, or even just 1G. People say "one gig" but I've never seen it spelled out that way. Microsoft co-president of the Platform Products and Services Group --> co-president of Microsoft's Platform Products and Services Group It reads like a Microsoft employee holds a position on a non-Microsoft industry group. Vista, and it's companion programs -- Drop the comma but there's plenty wrong.. -- Two periods offer precious little Windows users want beyond what's in Windows XP, but there's plenty wrong.. --> offer precious little Windows users want beyond what's in Windows XP, and plenty of things they don't want: Microsoft says the screws will be turned down even tighter due to rampant piracy of Vista already being experienced. -- Passive voice in both instances. Not sure how to re-write this. Swap the DRM and Windows Update bullets, and move the "criplle your computer" line to the end of the DRM bullet. IOW: # Windows Update is now mandatory. What's wrong with that? You have no defense against patches that break other stuff. # Microsoft's draconian DRM (Digital Rights Management) features not only interfere with your enjoyment of entertainment media you have purchased, but force you to have a much more powerful and expensive machine just to achieve XP level performance (V14). Worse, Microsoft has promised the media moguls they will cripple your computer if any DRM problems are found with your computer's hardware or drivers - this by Windows Update, of course (V14). Vista was so good a service pack --> Vista was so good that a service pack Most planned new features --> Most new features planned in favor of one, a draconian --> in favor of one: a draconian "one size fits all", that --> "one size fits all", the idea that "premium content" has no place on business computers anyway. -- I disagree. There is a huge amount of corporate training done via Flash, WMV, etc. increasing PR expenditures, working on ways to kill Windows XP to force Vista adoption, and ramp up --> increasing PR expenditures, working on ways to kill Windows XP to force Vista adoption, and ramping up It seems like jumping from the frying pan into the fire. --> It seems like jumping from the frying pan into a smaller frying pan. If you happen to be such a software developer --> If you happen to be such a software publisher === Kip Hawley is still an idiot. === Purveyor of Doc Hope's [link\|http://DocHope.com\|fresh-baked dog biscuits and pet treats]. [link\|http://DocHope.com\|http://DocHope.com]
Post #278,184 by Andrew Grygus 3/13/07 9:38:12 PM Reply	Thanks, many of your suggestions have been . . . . . incorporated or changes made suggested by them. I'll be posting the new version in just a bit. As to business use of "premium content", Flash and WMF used for training are not "premium content". What Microsoft means by "premium content" is copyrighted content from major studios and record companies flagged as such. In other words, the content Microsoft wants to be the monopoly conduit for. [link\|http://www.aaxnet.com\|AAx]
Post #278,185 by drewk 3/13/07 9:40:56 PM Reply	But can you create non-premium content? I thought one of the problems was that anything you create yourself will be automatically DRM-ed into oblivion, and only "professional" publishing kit will be able to unlock it. === Kip Hawley is still an idiot. === Purveyor of Doc Hope's [link\|http://DocHope.com\|fresh-baked dog biscuits and pet treats]. [link\|http://DocHope.com\|http://DocHope.com]
Post #278,187 by Andrew Grygus 3/13/07 9:47:39 PM Reply	I haven't heard that . . . . . and I'd expect a hideous outcry from creative people if that is true. What I have definitely heard is that if you are working on your own content, say visuals or animation, and you pop in a "premium content" CD to listen to some music while you work, your own work will be degraded in unpredictable ways and may be completely ruined. If you're a creative person it's probably best to keep "premium content" far away from the Vista machine you create content on. [link\|http://www.aaxnet.com\|AAx]

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