Post #202,746
4/10/05 7:19:26 PM
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Resume Review Request
Break out yer editing pens, gentlemen (and ladies)...
[link|http://www.oz.net/~inthane/resume.pdf|http://www.oz.net/~inthane/resume.pdf]
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Post #202,748
4/10/05 7:41:54 PM
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note also that you support linux and list the distros
even if it was not at work, if you know it, list it.
thanx,
bill
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Post #202,751
4/10/05 8:22:19 PM
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Yeah, add the Linux
I know you've done multiple paid
R&D projects with it, even if it
was not deployed.
So you have used it "professionally".
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Post #202,769
4/10/05 11:45:39 PM
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Re: Resume Review Request
A few things jumped out on a first "impression" skim:
Resumes that run past two pages often get shuffled to the end of the list. Yours could be shorted by dropped the list of skills at the end, and by collapsing the Volt jobs into a general description of duties plus set of bullet points for each gig. The skills are repeated throughout the resume. A separate list is only really useful if you're submitting the list electronically, and want to let a bot parse it out.
If there are skills you want to call out that you don't have "professional" experience with, an "Also familiar with" list is fair game.
One point of a resume is to tease people into wanting to ask for more. That's good; it gets you a foot in the door. Being overly specific about your experience with some technology (e.g., 1 year of Microsoft Mummble), is an excuse for someone in HR to turn you down. Here, vague is your friend.
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Post #202,785
4/11/05 12:51:37 AM
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Not bad
Cull some of the verbiage in the covering letter, don't duplicate the stuff you did at volt, pull the skills list to the front, and you should be golden. As mentioned above, don't forget to add skills that you've obtained such as Loonix and PC hardware.
Peter
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Post #202,786
4/11/05 12:53:29 AM
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Also
Do any MCSE exam out of your own pocket and pass it; it'll give you the MCP qualification.
Peter
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Post #202,832
4/11/05 9:44:08 AM
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Couple suggestions
Bring the Education bit to the first page and get rid of the "Work Status" line. Do you have a Top Secret clearance?
Also, if you're going to list out the skillsets, you don't need to include them in the descriptions of your various jobs. Focus more on the accomplishments in the job descriptions and less on the means.
For myself, I would also remove the "Target Job" bit. Those things are understood unless you are applying for something that describes itself outside of the "full-time, any schedule, start now" type.
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Post #202,841
4/11/05 10:07:12 AM
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I'm probably the worst person to ask
As I've only built a resume twice in the last 25 years and I've read even less of them. Anyhow, the cover letter needs to use "you" less often, as it makes it read not as well as it should. Perhaps something along the lines of: I am writing to explore employment opportunities with your organization. The enclosed resume will provide the details concerning my education, experience, and capabilities. I look forward to adding value to your team. I offer experience providing system support services in a variety of positions over the past 9 years. ... I am confident the combination of my training and experience will allow me to make valuable contributions to your organization. I would appreciate the opportunity to meet with you in person to discuss the organizational objectives and my abilities to fulfill them. Thank you for the time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you.
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Post #202,911
4/11/05 7:24:45 PM
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You might want to review mine
For format.
Skills, accomplishments, then specific jobs.
I related them via footnotes.
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Post #203,123
4/13/05 12:13:45 AM
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A bit prosey.
The employment blurbs are hard to scan because you have to read a paragraph to figure it out. I would suggest you convert it into points of Major Achievements and Key Responsibilities. You could also group the employment history by employer and then by job - that should let you group all the Volt positions together yet still have separate sections for each job you did. I'd also put the skills list before the employment history.
Compare mine (multiple formats): [link|http://yceran.org/cv/|http://yceran.org/cv/]
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Post #203,309
4/14/05 3:31:50 AM
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As a guy who ploughs through a few dozen a week
What I like to see is:
1) What I want/am
2) What I know
3) Where and how I've been applying what I know
4) Where I learned it
5) Whatever else you want to say - I probably won't read this far
Objective: Seeking a position as a Windows Desktop Support Professional
Skills:
Accomplishments: (work history - reverse chronological - I expect to see a subset of skills from section 2 listed here so I know this is where you used that)
Education:
Awards/Hobbies/Goofy Facts: - for instance, I've had a few former soap actor or movie bit players apply, this is where they mention they played officer #4 in Reservoir Dogs or whatever.
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Post #204,097
4/20/05 4:46:12 PM
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Updated, please review again.
[link|http://www.oz.net/~inthane/resume.pdf|http://www.oz.net/~inthane/resume.pdf]
Thanks a lot, guys!
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-Isaac Asimov
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Post #204,098
4/20/05 4:48:54 PM
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Looks a ton better... except...
The references are gonna look suspect. I wasn't aware the you knew Winky Doodle, Mickey Spilane and Walther Mitty.
Other than that, I like the over all feel of it, much better than the last.
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Post #204,099
4/20/05 4:50:51 PM
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Names changed to protect the innocent. :D
Actually, I've got about 15 people lined up from my last position who would be willing to be my reference, although only two of them worked with me in the IT department. I'm thinking about keeping it to three only, but I could literally fill a page (two columns) with contact info...
The most exciting phrase to hear in science, the one that heralds the most discoveries, is not "Eureka!" but "That's funny..."
-Isaac Asimov
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Post #204,136
4/20/05 7:20:28 PM
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I don't supply them until asked
Had a couple refs "burned" by recruiters just using the names to network contacts.
Move education to end unless you are wanting to do software development since you got a BS CS. If you are wanting to do software development, skill set should be right after objective. Actually skill set (this is where you put in a billion buzz words to skip dumb text filters) should be there regardless.
"Whenever you find you are on the side of the majority, it is time to pause and reflect" --Mark Twain
"The significant problems we face cannot be solved at the same level of thinking we were at when we created them." --Albert Einstein
"This is still a dangerous world. It's a world of madmen and uncertainty and potential mental losses." --George W. Bush
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Post #204,132
4/20/05 7:10:32 PM
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No Linux?
Am I blind> Did I miss it?
The hottest server phenomina, snowballing down the mountain, for the last 5 years, and you haven't touched it?
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Post #204,138
4/20/05 7:37:00 PM
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Not in a professional sense, no.
At least, nothing that got beyond a proof of concept. :P
The most exciting phrase to hear in science, the one that heralds the most discoveries, is not "Eureka!" but "That's funny..."
-Isaac Asimov
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Post #204,142
4/20/05 8:00:37 PM
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We've had this discussion
You were payed to install and test.
Just because your testing did not prove it was
a good solution for your current ennvironment
does not mean the time was wasted.
YOU USED IT PROFESSIONALLY!
Put it on the resume, be very clear about your usage.
The key issue is that anyone who claims years and
years of desktop and LAN network experience to have
ZERO Linux on his resume is someone who hasn't bothered
to even investigate one of the hottest tech topics
in years. Which means I would not want that person
working in my environment, even if it is purely an
MS shop. Which very few are nowadays.
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Post #204,161
4/20/05 9:01:37 PM
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yep, that would be a no interview with me
windows drones are usually hacks, so get that linux in there.
thanx,
bill
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Post #204,187
4/20/05 10:58:24 PM
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Yeah, I mentioned it on mine
Though ony in 'skills'. In no way do I claim expertise, though...
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Post #204,188
4/20/05 10:59:28 PM
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Perfectly reasonable
The goal is to get into the door without lying.
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